IELTS Task 1 Writing

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart illustrates the various uses of electricity, while the line graph displays the variation
in daily electricity consumption across two seasons.

Overall, the demand for electricity is generally much higher in the winter than it is in the
summer, with notable daily variations. Heating uses more than half of the electricity throughout
the winter.

Electricity demand varies significantly, peaking at around 48,000 units in winter evenings in a
typical year, while usage remains lower and stable in summer.
Electricity demand in summer stays relatively steadily, ranging between 18,000 and 20,000 units
in a typical year.

📘 Task Achievement (Band 6.5)

Strengths:

The response addresses the task, describing both the line graph and pie chart.

The main trends (winter higher than summer, heating dominant in winter) are mentioned.

Areas to improve:

Data detail is lacking. Only peak values and rough ranges are mentioned. The writer should
include more comparisons and specific data points (e.g., hours of lowest usage, evening spikes,
etc.).

The pie chart is underdeveloped. Only heating is discussed; the other three categories are
ignored.

No overview paragraph is clearly separated or well-developed, which is key for a high score.

📘 Coherence and Cohesion (Band 6.5)

Strengths:

The ideas are presented in a logical order.

There’s some use of linking words (e.g., “Overall,” “while”).

Areas to improve:

Transitions between ideas could be smoother and clearer.

Paragraphing could be better organized, especially with a distinct overview and body sections.

Some parts feel abrupt or disconnected (e.g., “Electricity demand in summer...” seems dropped
in at the end).

📘 Lexical Resource (Band 6.5–7)

The vocabulary is mostly appropriate: words like “demand,” “peak,” “consumption,” and
“usage” fit well.

Synonyms and paraphrasing attempts are evident.

Areas to improve:

Some repetition is present: “demand,” “usage,” “electricity” repeated without variation.

Could benefit from more varied expressions, especially for describing change and comparison
(e.g., “fluctuates,” “remains constant,” “roughly double,” “significantly higher than”).

📘 Grammatical Range and Accuracy (Band 6)

Strengths:

Basic sentence structures are mostly accurate.

A few complex sentences are attempted.

Areas to improve:

Limited range of sentence structures—mostly simple or compound.

Some awkward or incorrect phrasing, like:

“Heating uses more than half of the electricity” (better: "Heating accounts for over half of the
electricity usage").

“Stays relatively steadily” (should be “stays relatively steady” or “remains steady”).

✨ Overall Band Score: 6.5

This is a solid Band 6.5 performance. It covers the key trends and uses appropriate vocabulary
and structure, but it lacks:

Sufficient data detail and comparisons

Grammatical and lexical variety

✅ Suggestions to Improve to Band 7+

Include more specific figures and time references (e.g., “At 3 a.m., winter usage is around 35,000
units…”).

Clearly structure the response:

Introduction

Overview

Body 1: Line graph (winter vs summer)

Body 2: Pie chart (all 4 categories)

Use comparative language consistently: "twice as much as," "approximately," "by contrast," etc.

Expand grammatical range with more complex sentence types and passive structures.
Band 8 Sample Answer

The line graph illustrates the typical daily electricity consumption in winter and summer, while
the pie chart provides a breakdown of how electricity is used in winter.
Overall, electricity demand is significantly higher in winter than in summer, with noticeable
fluctuations throughout the day. The highest proportion of electricity in winter is used for
heating rooms and water.
In winter, electricity consumption starts at around 35,000 units at midnight, then gradually
decreases to approximately 30,000 units by 6 a.m. It then rises sharply throughout the day,
peaking at around 48,000 units at 9 p.m., before dropping again to its starting level by midnight.
In contrast, summer electricity usage is relatively stable, fluctuating modestly between 18,000
and 20,000 units throughout the day, with a slight increase in the evening.
The pie chart shows that in winter, over half of the electricity (52.5%) is used for heating
purposes. The next largest proportion, at 17.5%, is consumed by ovens, kettles, and washing
machines. Lighting, television, and radio account for 15%, while vacuum cleaners, food mixers,
and electric tools make up the remaining 15%.
To summarize, while electricity usage in summer is steady and low, winter sees a much greater
and more variable demand, primarily driven by heating needs.

✨ Why this is Band 8:

Clear overview included in paragraph 2.

Accurate data description with comparisons and time references.

Wide range of vocabulary: “peaking,” “fluctuating,” “account for,” “proportion,” etc.

Good grammar variety: passive voice, complex structures, and appropriate linking words.